Sorrow hovered over me a like the dark cloud
Blocking the sun’s rays from reaching me
My hopeful peeks into my future were blinded
By the piercing glare of my impossible goal
I tried to block the light with my hands
And that was when I found out I was invisible,
and why my screams reached deaf years
I tried to move forward to my goal
But found myself tied to my putrid past
by the laughter around me:
You are too insignificant.
You won’t make it. What a joke!
Holding back tears, I fell on my knees.
They had finally opened the oak door that
I had tried all my life to keep locked
And all my nightmares came onto me,
to further lower me into my grave.
I stood there with a drooping face
waiting for defeat to capture me.
Like dew refreshing a dying flower
I felt a cool mist surround and rejuvenate me
The love of those who cared for me,
Blocking the sun’s rays from reaching me
My hopeful peeks into my future were blinded
By the piercing glare of my impossible goal
I tried to block the light with my hands
And that was when I found out I was invisible,
and why my screams reached deaf years
I tried to move forward to my goal
But found myself tied to my putrid past
by the laughter around me:
You are too insignificant.
You won’t make it. What a joke!
Holding back tears, I fell on my knees.
They had finally opened the oak door that
I had tried all my life to keep locked
And all my nightmares came onto me,
to further lower me into my grave.
I stood there with a drooping face
waiting for defeat to capture me.
Like dew refreshing a dying flower
I felt a cool mist surround and rejuvenate me
The love of those who cared for me,
those I have abandoned for my quest for the stars.
I let the tears from my crimson eyes
wash away the sin I had committed.
Closing myself onto me
my dream on my mind,
I walked towards my goal.
I let the tears from my crimson eyes
wash away the sin I had committed.
Closing myself onto me
my dream on my mind,
I walked towards my goal.
Its Priya Joyce's birthday on 27th and i wish her a really wonderful birthday..
78 comments:
WOW!!amazing..nicely written amal..
but y so serious kinda thought dear?
be happy ur xams are going on..n may u acheive watever u wish for
Good luck!!
thanks a lot..
actually its these stupid exams that are bringing these kinda sad thoughts :(
thats a good work, liked the choice of words :) but sad, huh?
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dear amal,
between the exams,a post from you!lovely!i know,you have to reach the heights and you will never give up!tht's my friend!
birthday wishes to priya from me too!
cheer up!you are so talented!
sasneham,
anu
sad and deep indeed.
but very well written bro..
wowwwwwww...this simply touched me...
ultimately its our dear ones..special ppl of our life who..bring us out from the depths..sad depths....
very well said...
thnx da...
thnx a lot for the wish :)
hugz
very strong..very emotional..like it
@Lena
thanks.. well in spite of all these sadness he still have hope :-)
@anu
thanks a lot.. :-)
@Chriz
thanks a lot buddy..
good day :-)
@Priya
thanks a lot dear...
have a wonderful day..
keep smiling :-)
**And all my nightmares came onto me,
to further lower me into my grave.
kick those night mares bro :)...u will be happy in a moment after kicking them :)..wonderful write up...just one that...u dont have to be sad when ur towards the goal..:)..
urs..hemu..
Exams, huh? Happens. Take care and do your best. :)
@hemu
thanks bro..
good day :-)
@ki
yeah..
thanks :-)
@Niti
thanks a lot
cheers :-)
Loved this mate... had depth :)
Happy budday to PJ :)
cheers...
@arv
thanks a lot mate :-)
Exams? Are you younger than me too?
I've been feeling quite old lately. :(
Its a very well crafted poem. Poignant array of words.
Good luck towards achieving your goals.
beautifully written....
Aren't you bored of so nice comments every time ;)...
Gosh!! you always write so well...
this ws indeed one of your best articles...
my! my!
look who's philosophising over exams:)
come on now, u r way too significant than u think u r...none of us can be Amal Bose, right?
All the best buddy ..do well at the tests!
hmmm... we do move forward and we leave behind the ones who had taken us to that position until... yes we realize what we really are!
Nice expressions... :)
Trust me its long way to go .... But do not worry much ..... Just Chillax
hey mate
thanks a ton for dropping by
nicely pen down
actually i out of town
wud visit again
thanks
Pallav
Beautiful!! :)
Oh btw do you know OG ? ** the link is in my blog roll**
he is from CET too but he has passed out :)
Beautifull wel written...
bt i can that sadness in ever lines... very touching..
Good luck for everything..
@Aniket
ya.. guess i am..
thanks a lot mate.. :)
@ Deepika
thanks a lot dear... :)
@ Vinnie
thanks Vinnie. thanks a lot for the kind words :)
keep smiling
@ Diya
yes.. thats what life is..
thanks for the comment :)
@ Rahul
thanks buddy :)
@ Pallav
thanks for the visit mate..
do come back :)
@Winnie
hmm.. i dont think so.. he was my senior.. ill check it out..
@ Devil
thanks.. :)
we get touched with degrading incidences in our life, but the best part is to collect your thought and energy to stand tall......good one buddy!!!!!
thanks buddy :)
I wish I had a flair for poetry. This was beautiful.
Kisses.
thanks... :)
cheers
Nicely written, really liked it.:)
sniff..sniff..OH WTH!
Now look what you've done!
Dammit I've got something in my eye!
:)
@ sneha
thanks a lot.. :-)
@ DPhatSez
thanks for the visit, do drop in again :-)
Like the choice of words..nicely woven.
Psst..you got misled by my post..it wasn't about me, its pure fiction!
thanks..
sorry abt that ;)
thanks for your visit to my blog! i really like your poetry and writing.
thanks a lot.. :-)
Hi Amal,
I really like your poem. And, it is good to know that you sketch; I used to, once upon a time.
Have a nice day.
Ayesha
glad i m not alone there without that experience!
keep moving until your
date with the goal is met!
beautifully written, amal ! :)
@ Ayesha Parveen
hi Ayesha.. thanks for coming here n commenting..
thanks a lot :)
cheers
@ deeps
yeah.. thats wat we all shd do..
thanks for the visit :)
@cavaliere84
thanks a lot for coming here...
:)
Beautiful Amal, when the mind speaks words mouldup in such a way that they create a bridge for us to let go of our inner fears or joy.Your world seem to come right from the core of your inner self:)
Great going and thanks for visiting my blog!Take care!
wow...this amazing stuff!!!
u really write well man ...keep up the good work..!!!
take care!!
Lovely Lines even though its sad. Very Well Pen Down. Keep Blogging :) All The Very Best Success :)
@ A New Beginning
thanks a lot for the visit n for leaving a comment..
do visit again :)
@ Nazish Rahman
thanks a lot... :)
@ Creativity
thanks a tonne :)
Hmm...rather depressing. And yes , very relevant to today's events. One sees many so blinded in a desperate search for so-called success that they forget the things that really matter.
Good work. Keep writing.
That was great and the photo went so well with it.
waaa waaa wooooooooooooommm!!!
Lovely! Chak de!
i like and appreciate the hope and love in your poem....
its beautiful...in spite of our sorrow,hopelessness,putrid past,insignificant life ,impossible goals of our life still there is love which washes away all our sins ......and shows us a brighter tomorrow ,helps us to dream .....
finite love helps us to feel the infinite love of our BELOVED..
light n peace.
Amazing .... But too sad... I feel for you ....
Very well put !!!!
Wishing you luck ... keep writing. keep smiling !!!
quite inspiring,considering my present state of mind. This will surely help me in writing my next blgo post!!!!!
.. will keep visiting.. thanks!!! :)
My first visit here. Nice write up.
this is exactly how i feel rt now :| thx fr putting wrds to my feelings...
@Gymnast
thanks a lot for the kind words :)
@ 2sweetnsaxy
thanks n do visit again :)
@ AD
:)
@ Dewdrop
thanks...
nice day :)
@shree
thanks a lot for visiting this blog and commenting :)
@ Adisha
thanks :)
@ Diya
thanks.. so happy to hear that ive helped someone..
do visit again :)
@ Nikki
welcome to my blog..
n thanks for the comment
do visit again :)
@Pretty Me!!
thanks for the comment..
keep smiling :)
"And that was when I found out I was invisible,
and why my screams reached deaf years
Nice line! Keep writing!
Deep and dark! Cheers to the dark side in all of us and to you for expressing it.
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