May 1, 2009
The Brightness of Truth
I peeked out into the wonderful world outside
From within my parents shell around me
And waited eagerly for the fine day
I would be granded wings on my own.
With a heart spilling with emotions
I stepped out of the broken shell.
Crushing its pieces under by feet,
I walked out into the brightness.
In the light that has been shielded by my shell,
I saw the world as it really was.
No longer under a filter, my heart slowly learned
The stinking truth of the real world.
Where lies roamed free without a reason,
A hidden sneer always tailed a plastic smile,
Where some fasted for a better posture,
While other to hide their hunger.
Where people killed like dogs in the streets,
While others learned to blind themselves
And to stare at their own paths
Where the only mantra was "I, Me and Mine".
I tried to shield myself and ignore it
But the blanket around me slowly faded away.
I found myself stink with the world around me.
I had finally become a part of the chaos.
Around me I heard sound of cracking shells
Eager faces glancing out of their breaking shells
To stare into the unknown world,
And to face the brightness of truth.
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u have put it so so well....its the sad truth we all hav ta face and.what is worse is we can't do nythng...ahhh!!
pleez share this everywere u can..let more people read it
:)
Fabulous job! I like the expression 'plastic smile', it's SO true these days!!!
the poem is well written....
a good natural flow of words...
but what you have written is a cynic s attitude....
Of course life has a lot of shit in it.. but who cares i have a lot of people to love, lot of good things to do and a lot of smiles to deliver.
and priya.... who says you cant do anything about it... start simple spread a smile today...
tell someone you love them that you love them....
why is that even teens today are such cynics... man and to think that they haven't even tasted even half of their lives......
thank you priya.. i think people dont want to anything and they just follow the crowd.
@ki
you are right.
now a days we just want to pretend to like others for our own benefits
@muthu
thank you.. :-)
just because there is some good in this world doesnt mean we can ignore all the evil, can we?
Amal!!
beautiful expression..very strong n to the point..loved this para so...
//Where lies roamed free without a reason,
A hidden sneer always tailed a plastic smile,
Where some fasted for a better posture,
While other to hide their hunger.//
n this one is amazing, man...//Around me I heard sound of cracking shells
Eager faces glancing out of their breaking shells
To stare into the unknown world,
And to face the brightness of truth.//
overall..extremely well-worded..great work!
your new blog header is excellent...the layout is perfect i liked the neat feel too..
i have some time on my hands today..planning to change my blog layout too:):)
Well, Muthu is right when he says..we can be good in our little ways..spread the smile n that smile will go a long way in bringing it back to our lips when we r down...like a bommerang!
amazing discussions ensued fro mthis poem..way to go!
@Vinnie
thank u Vinnie, those are my fav too..
and good luck for your new template :-)
Sad..but true..but thats life..:)
and once u know the rules in the game..its not as bad!! or probably u just get used to it..
Hope it feels better in the days to come.. i liked your writing style..different than ur other works
beautiful poem mate :)..just loved it...i love the template and the header :)...good job..
urs..hemu..
hey...
wow, u sketch and u write..hmm..
CET? i was at cet for an exam recently. at the EEE dept i guess.. since i had a lotta tym to spare in the exam hall, i took the liberty of deciphering the writings on the desk. " what the f*** is wrong with the system man..i feel like staring into the infinity" something similiar to this was written der...kudos to tht soul.. hope u aint that one..
Where lies roamed free without a reason,
A hidden sneer always tailed a plastic smile,
Where some fasted for a better posture,
While other to hide their hunger.loved these lines.
thanx for following me. glad u thot my style of writing was good..pls visit the blog often...
:)
cheers!
er..just what i said. some troubled soul scribbled the lines on the desk. i felt an instant kinship with that soul..was entertaiment in those troubled times while i was pondering over equations..there were other things too,but i remember this one only. the class was one with a window which kept making noise whenever the wind blew. has something on the wall near the entrance to the class.enogh to catch eyes, but written in small print. am sure you will find it(cant mention what was written,). and i am almost sure it was the eee dept.
found it a coincidence that i read ur blog after my visit to cet. great col, cool campus.. big!!!
forget it. i had to mention the fact..:) dont let it trouble you.
Thanks a lot Niti..
Thanks Hemanth.. i was a bit worried abt how the blog would luk after i changed the theme .. ;)
@ Damsel in distress
thanks a lot..
ya we get different art forms from the desks of our clg.. from arts to dialogues to even love letters... ;)
well just a specialty of our clg
This place looks a lil different. Changed your theme huh ? :D
Loved the poem!
ya i changed the theme.. tried a simple n lighter one. hope it works out well :-)
Someone is turning poetic ;)
great going.. \m/
he he.. just trying ;)
dat was nice...gud attempt...sorry im late :) had clg...
Hey, thanks for visiting and commenting on my blog. :)
"The stinking truth of the real world"
I loved this. Indeed the world does stink, and the apt way in which you have expressed people from their birth to the time when they turn into notorious animals, is very succinct. I appreciate it whole heartedly. :)
Hey, am following your blog, hope you have no problem. :)
Bye, and keep 'em burning.
Cheers. :)
You indeed have a mind-blogging blog dude. :)
@ kochu
thanks dude ;-)
@ diya
thanks a lot..
well.. i definitely dont have any problem with that. ;-)
True !!! Loved it ........
thank u Rahul
very very strong poetry amal... loved it :)
U hav put those lines so well that, nomore explanation is needed..
The interesting thing is that u didnt really hav to exagerate nything, wt ever u wrote were those simple truths abt reality..
nicely written ..and expressed so well!!
@little girl
thank you :-)
@ Devil
thank you soo much :-)
@ mathew
Thank you..
take care ;-)
wow, nice new layout:)
Simple and sweet! It flows beautifully :)
Nice attempt. Yea , world is a mess. After all , we r the ones who live in it! :-)
@Tina
thank you..
@ Winnie
thanks a lot
@Gymnast
thank you :-(
n quite true...
Wow.. this is so awesome. and honest.
BEUtifully xpressed..kudos!!
good day!
@ Rene
thanks a lot rene :)
@ Swati
thanks a lot..
good day to u too..
Amal, Very impressive. Salute the poet in you and your ability to catpure and pen it down so well. Again... deep and dark.
May you find your light!
A very strong message here! I liked it! It is only when you are on your own, free to decipher things on your own that even the darkest hour is lit and brought to attention. Most regret doing so after learning from it.
However, you might want to check the word "granded". No offence intended here.
What you have portrayed is reality.......We just follow the crowd......Your poem makes the readers reflect upon themselves...
Nice work...
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