June 22, 2009

The Meeting

Catherine placed the receiver back with a fervent smile on her face and leaned back onto her chair.
It has been long since she had seen him. Hours of talks on the phone was nothing compared to the smile on his face when he sees her. She recollected each word Kevin had said.
“…it has been a while, honey... I desperately wanted to see your face ... n I wanted it to be a surprise.”
She had no words to reply.
“Well meet you at the old park. What do you say?” he asked “When will you be free?”
“In an hour… oh... may be half an hour…” she smiled
“Good. I’ll be there… love ya... bye”
Wiping away tears from her eyes, she got up. The usually boring day had suddenly found the dewdrops it was waiting for.
No time to waste. She sank in to complete the report she had to submit the next day.
A while later, a nurse walked into her room and seeing her packing, asked.
“Leaving early Dr. Catherine?”
“Yeah... big plans, Susan” she said trying the least to hide her happiness.
“Hmm... I can see that in your face” Susan said”... too bad you were asked to report to the emergency room... a minor accident case”
“What? No... I’ve gotto go... its really important. Can’t Lizzie cover up for me? Ask her, please. I have to go. Besides it’s my shift is over too.”
She always considered her job as sacred, but it has taken all happiness from her life… kept her away from Kevin. She was not ready to let it happen this time too. She too wanted to have some contentment in her life. She quickly took her stuff and headed out.
As her car headed out of her the hospital, a crowd beside the junction caught her attention. Accidents have become a regular occurrence here. Why aren’t the authorities doing anything for it? She asked herself. But it was while taking the turn that she saw the wrecked car. Her heart sank as the world around her contracted onto her filling her teary eyes with darkness.

Trying hard to keep herself up, she got out of her car and ran back. She ran back to the hospital praying with all her heart to not let it be true.

Pushing open the emergency door, she saw the white sheet been put over the beautiful face she had so longed to see.

91 comments:

swati said...

Amal i wud jus say that i had tears reading this..somewhr while reaching the mid of the story i knew wats gonna happen..
bt it touched me completely.

Amal Bose said...

thanks swati...
i dont know.. almost all my stories ends in tragedy, so there is no surprise at the end..
i think i shd start trying something different

Gymnast said...

Thats nicely written Amal , but predictable. And why are all your stories sad?

Shravan | ശ്രവണ്‍ said...

that was touching.. but it was predictabled also.. but made a good read :)

Dhanya said...

Yup.. somewhat predicted the end too... but it was nice :)

santasizing...Fantasizing said...

hmmmmmm....very touching:)
indeed!!!:)
lovely!

slow processor said...

Amal,
With the complete control over the story on your hands,you could have avoided the tragedy...ha?
Hmm..You could have avoided that..
Like life, story tellers are also turning to be merciless these days..

very good narration..I appreciate!

Vinnie said...

kya yaar!
hamesha dukhi karthe ho :(
still, it was quite impressive, though predictable :)

Preetilata【ツ】 said...

was a bit predictable...but it left me in tears.

very nicely written.

Elly said...

I really like your writings.
Very beautiful and touching!

Vinitha Vasanth said...

Yeah .. it was predictable ..but you write well :)

Brosreview said...

Although predictable (no offence), it is the way you wrote it that made it an interesting read. Hmm, gripping (?!), I could add.

Good job! Keep writing!!!

Rahul Viswanath said...

I just love your sad endings !!! Smart piece ......

Arv said...

Nooooooooo :(

lakshmi said...

sad.......touching
nice one though

Devil Incarnate... said...

Very very touching one...
i had almost predicted the end.. bt still felt very bad...

Satyu said...

:)

Really beautiful narration Amal... Liked it very much :)

takecare
keepsmiling

damsel in distress said...

since you have asked to comment so as to help you improve-the story narration is really good, and you have got a nice flair for the language..but the story content is a little bit common,and predictable..try simple stuff,things you feel about etc...

btw-you always come up with really sad stories!! don't kill all these characters off..;)

SindhuBhairavi said...

Amal.. this is the first story of yours that i read, The way of narration is impressive !! i read from the other comments that your stories have a sad end.. thats something i dont like very much! :) This one leaves one very sad in the end.. but to make the reader sad too is a talent. But next time.. makes us smile :)

take care...

sherin said...

nicely written ..
but he could have lived..it was a minor accident

Amal Bose said...

@Gymnast
im sorry, i dont really know.. its usually the ending that comes to my mind first along with the general plot .. n then i develop the beginning n all..
thanks for the comment :)

Amal Bose said...

@Shravan
welcome to the blog
thanks for the comment :)

Amal Bose said...

@ Dhanya..
i know.. :(
im sorry.. ill do better next time

Amal Bose said...

@santasizing...Fantasizing
thanks for teh comment :)

Amal Bose said...

@Slow processor..
i try to relate my stories more closer to reality.. n according to me, real life sucks

Amal Bose said...

@ Vinnie
thanks Vinnie :)

Amal Bose said...

@ Preetilata
i think i kinda enjoy making others cry..
thanks for the comment :)
tc

Amal Bose said...

@ Elly
thanks Elly.. do visit often :)
take care

Amal Bose said...

@ Vinitha
thanks for the comment :)

Amal Bose said...

@ Brosreview
thanks buddy.. :)
take care

Amal Bose said...

@ Arv
:(
thanks for the comment :)

Amal Bose said...

@lakshmi
thanks for the feedback
take care n keep smiling :)

Amal Bose said...

@ Devil Incarnate...
thanks for the feedback..
take care :)

Amal Bose said...

@ Satyu
thanks dear..
take care :)

Amal Bose said...

@ Damsel
i will try next time..
well regarding the tragic endings.. i dont really know, its wat comes to my mind

Amal Bose said...

@ Sindhu
ill try.. :)
take care

Amal Bose said...

@ Sherin
but he wasnt lucky enough :(

SAHITYIKA said...

wow..
very touching..
but a lil bit of predictable..
but still full of emotions..

Amal Bose said...

@Rahul
thanks a lot :-)

Amal Bose said...

@Sahityika
thanks for the feedback :-)

Smita said...

Veeery well written though I was able to guess the end blame it to the fact that I read too much :)

But very well written story!!!

Red_Devil said...

yeah...it started off very well dude, especially the dew drops comparison...awesome...
but the story was a little cliched and hence after tht pretty predictable...maybe all the stories end in tragedy coz only the daring can conjure good works from bad endings...;)

nice reading though man...

Aniket said...

Palpable emotions flowed through the piece. Loved it.

Its not at all necessary for a story to have a twist for it to be good. This one sure is.

Steve said...

Its good. But i guessed it.
:P

Amal Bose said...

@ Smita
thanks smita..
take care :)

Amal Bose said...

@ Red_Devil
thanks buddy..
ya, it was kinda cliched :(

Amal Bose said...

@ Aniket
thanks a lot for the feedback :)

Amal Bose said...

@ steve
thanks :)

Chhaya said...

Sorry for taking it so long to check ur blog.. and to tell u the truth, it was worth the wait.

you are very talented Amal.. beautiful story. i will read all of them one by one.

this one was slightly predictable, i knew what will happen the moment that ER thing came up.. but yeah, death is so unpredictable..

btw, one typo - " But it was while taking the turn that he saw the wrecked car." .. i think the "he" shud be "She"

hope u dont hate me for pointing it out.. its just that the story is so beautiful, i want that typo out of there :)
PS: i m a typo queen myself

Qi said...

I knew it was going to be him! Still it was heart rending. :(

Amal Bose said...

@ Chhaya
thanks for notifying the typo..
take care :)

Amal Bose said...

@ Qi
thanks for the comment :)

Ashwathy said...

ugh!! Somehow I knew that was coming!! I HATE unhappy endings :-(

but yes, written well...!

Priya Joyce said...

a big sorry for th late comment..but all blames to the net not me :P


well the post ..i can just say..I was deeply touched..
i predicted it yet was in tear wen i reached the end..:(
ahhh!!

Priya Joyce said...

Chk the typos sorry :(

DPhatsez said...

Are you a niraasha kaamukan?

Tragedy..thy name is Amal

Mahi said...

Oh my God! So poignant! Made me cry:(

sujata said...

Why such a sad story?? I feel the characters needed a bit more of a build up..

Saranya said...

Very touching but beautifully written. :)

Amal Bose said...

@Ashwathy
thanks :)
do visit again

Amal Bose said...

@ Priya..
thats ok PJ
n thanks for the comment :)

Amal Bose said...

@DPhatsez
Noo....
my stories somehow happens to have a tragic ending.. but im changing now :)

Amal Bose said...

@Mahi
im happy that i made u cry ;)
thanks for the comment :)

Amal Bose said...

@ sujata..

thanks for the advice.. ill work on it next time :)
take care

Amal Bose said...

@ Saranya
thanks a lot :)

joiedevivre said...

it was not very different quite regular but nicely written

Shanu said...

Loved it..although the end was quite predictable..loved the way u narrated it.

Kartz said...

Forget the predictable part... Poignant. Very. Period.

Keep the thoughts in flow...

Peace. Be well.

Amal Bose said...

@ joiedevivre
thanks :)

Aparna said...

Why Amal Why? You had the power to change the end.
I am sad and you are way too talented. Keep writing.

Winnie the poohi said...

A sad story :(

Ashwadhy said...

Amal, good narration and touching. Am hodling myself from asking... why the sad ending?

Amal Bose said...

@ Shanu
thanks :)

Amal Bose said...

@ Kartz
thanks a lot for the commment :)

Amal Bose said...

@ Aparna
he he.. i kinda like sad endings
next one will be diff ;)

Amal Bose said...

@ Winnie the poohi
thanks for the feedback
do visit again

Amal Bose said...

@ Ashwadhy
thanks Ashwadhy..
well.. i try to make it more life like... :)

MultiMenon said...

Great...am going short of words aliyaa... :) vann!!!

Ippol athikam kanaarillalloo???

Nikhil

Sowmi said...

Hey Amal,

That was a beautiful story with PAIN AND MELANCHOLY dominating :) I really felt bad and I can't imagine something like that happen to anyone :(

Sorry for the late comment! Logged in after long break :)Will keep reading :)

Amal Bose said...

@ Nikhil
thanks buddy..
exam aayirunnu.. thats y :)

Amal Bose said...

@ Sowmi

thanks for the comment..
do visit again :)

Sowmi said...

Amal! I've read 5 to 10 post of yours :) Just that I've been visiting here silently :) You've "Sama" (tamizh word) Creativity :) Keep going :)

Cheers,

Cяystal said...

This is very realistic and so nt fiction.. bt it was predictable..sorry!

Amal Bose said...

@ Sowmi
i cant express how happy i felt after seeing this comment.
thanks a lot :)

Amal Bose said...

@ Crystal
thanks for the comment :)

Roshmi Sinha said...

Nice story!

You are quite the storyteller...

hary!! said...

it was soo good! made me think a lot! first time here mate...keep the good work...God Bless!

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

gud..macha u r doin gr8...keep growin...nice read..n ahem ahem im bak in business!!!

Chiranjib said...

nice one this...

anupama said...

dear amal,
i reached late to such a beautiful creation........you know,iam in tears now.and i could guess,it would happen this way...........what a touching post!
why do you deny the pleasure of meeting to good people?think of the brighter side,amal.
MY GOD! i have an exam tomorrow.
hey,n the secret is it's a commedy now.it was a real come back,man.didn't i tell you yesterady?some people realise it later...........so,can i smile now?
so,give me a story with a happy ending. sasneham,
anu

Deepika Gupta said...

:(